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I'm caught up in the funny
accent, and the rugged
goatee: blonde,
bleached blonde.

A smile wide and
White, straight teeth,
Illuminated dully in the
Overhead lights.

School is dull.

And yet, again, I find myself
Frowning, in something like
embarrassment at the
glare of your green eyes
on me, your face
too close for comfort,
I believe.

There is something like
Amusement
In your eyes, taunting
subtly, as you laugh
Out loud.

Such charm is
Intimidating,
Captivating,
Seldom seen,
Enough to draw the
Moths out
Of hiding.

Am I a moth?

Dear God,
I hope not.
Ahhhhh, he makes me feel embarrassment for no particular reason. I hate life.
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februaryblue Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love how the poem is a stream of consciousness, but there's a point to it. It makes the poem interesting (the line breaks do too), but keeps it from being too heavy. It's very good. :D
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rrbb1313 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
Thanks! :iconjoyplz:
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hyperfluxy Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012   Writer
This is extraordinarily clever, and i love it especially

And yet, again, I find myself
Frowning, in something like
embarrassment at the
glare of your green eyes
on me, your face
too close for comfort,
I believe.


lovely work. :heart:
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rrbb1313 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
Ahh thank you!! I always frown when I'm embarrassed. Like, a really big frown. I don't know why. :iconbigfrownplz:
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hyperfluxy Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012   Writer
Hahaha. I am so glad <3. I hope its a good embarrased!
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rrbb1313 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
Oh, it's a joy, trust me.
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BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Student Writer
This poem is so incredible! :) The feelings and descriptions are amazing, and hold so many interesting nuances! This piece was fun to read, and extremely engaging. Great work!
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rrbb1313 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
Thanks!! :iconahhplz:
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BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome! XD
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Naiah57 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Such an amazing poem! I love the lines and the descriptions of what you say. Everything makes me just feel like I'm there seeing what you're writing, so really great job on this; I respect you since I suck at describing in poetry
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